I wrote this it is awesome!!!!

Id actually consider more average than awesome...the thoughts nice but it need to be set out how u would like it read, it sort of jumps from one thing to another and doesn't have a storyline or make too much sense...you have my admiration for trying...and whether its you or your friend who commented on my work i dont appreciate negative personal comments - give me something i can improve my writing with next time if you have soemthing negative to say like i have had the consideration to give you...looking forward to you posting some new stuff for us to read...Eirisa xoxo

fantastic