Comments : This Firey Bliss

  • 10 years ago

    by ThebutterfliesMuse

    I love the title and the use of it at the end!!. I love the imagery in this poem and how again you feel your love is apart of you!!. The wording is so well done here it leaves me thinking. And thr feeling of a kiss can make you feel so many things. Wonderful emotion. 5

  • 10 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I really like this poem, it's well written. the flow is amazing, and I love the personality of voice. The style is well done and you are well composed. Excellent job.

    I saw the burning inside his eyes
    Glimpsed his strange smile as he lips left mine

    ^^ Excellent, gripping start. Pulled me in and really made a statement.

    The searing pain, no doubt from the fire
    that coursed through his body, now coursed through mine

    ^^ This stanza was very descriptive, great use of skill.

    The embers now faded to a dull, warm glow
    with every beat of my heart growing increasingly slow

    ^^ Love the word choice here. Beautiful job.

    It seems long ago I felt the fire he started
    Quick was his entrance, and quicker he departed

    ^^ Love the way you did this. Perfect.

    Now here I stand waiting once more for his kiss
    to leave me in that breathless, fiery bliss

    ^^ My favorite stanza. Very unique and conclusive. I love how you made the title fit into the piece itself. Nice job, elegant.

    5/5