Bravo Hellon!

I love the title to this as it really is an eye catcher. You did such a great job here with your wording. The lines hold so much emotion. It truly makes the reader think about what he is observing. I love the imagery though. I can see through this person's eyes as they look at something so beauty. An iris is a great word to use for part of tbe eye or the flower. Either way. :). You wrote a beautiful piece

Lovely senryu! Love the play on double meanings and agreed with the comment above me, the title is an eye catcher!