Wow saffie. Your mind seems to work wonders. This isso uunique. I love the way you started out as it says you are the host of this life. It seems you are showing your life or parts of it. I like it because you take it step by step. You talk about the innocence of childhood and how our eyes are filled with love and wonder at such a young age. I love the dancing beneath the moon as you show how much of a free spirit a child is. The second act is really sad but I know thats what you wanted to portray. The abuse is usually ignored sadly and all you needed was a hero just one person. Its crazy to think about how one thing can change a person's life for the good or bad. You have a stolen childhood and I loved the way you describe it. The cloud hangs over your head from a memory that scars you. A black cloud as you have been hurt so much.

I love how you point out or talk about the guy that abused you. The way you worded it that's just a lil payback from what they did to you. It's difficult to have all eyes on you and I loved that line as it shows how much they hurt you with a lil revenge. I like scene four as it is the real build up for the payback you have in store in your mind. Every emotion you write about him is great as you show that he is scared of you and he knows why you asked him up but doesn't know the payback yet. I think he is starting to learn his lesson but still is fearful.

I love how the payback is here. It is simple but really in the mind of the guy he might be scarred for a long longtime. Just like how abuse is if you think about it . I love the last little bit. It seems no one really knows you were abused but now they do. You really are a survivorand strong. Abuse is really hard to come back from. This truly is a masterpeice in my eyes. Every line connects so well and flows great. 5/5. Nominated!!!

I admire that you have done something so different with this verse. To put it into little scenes for the audience was a brilliant idea!

I'm not going to pull this one apart because...I feel each scene was very personal to you and...I hope it's made you move on in the end. In your past poems on this subject, I was never too sure if they were fact or fiction and now...yes, I know.

You are obviously dealing with this and...you probably always will feel hate and resentment but...you also show a determination to not let it get the better of you so...kudos for that.

One little question and...I hate to bring it up on this type of poem but...know you'd be annoyed at me if I didn't...

of the ones who spent a childhood hidden in silence.

Should it just be one here...?