Comments : He's the demon cast out

  • 10 years ago

    by Alanis

    You did well for someone who is still getting back on their feet!! Its a well constructed, short and sweet without being around the bush, my critique is that like when you sed drug me in the dark, it seems a bit outta place I suggest something like, drowned or pursued, that's my opinion, well done

    • 10 years ago

      by alex cherneski

      Thank you :) and yea that does sound a little better, at that moment I just couldn't think of anything else. lol but thank you very much for your advice!! I really appreciate it! =))