Comments : You Think You Know (Couplet)

  • 10 years ago

    by broken sword

    Wow awesm lines..
    Fifty percent say they dedicate their lives for
    the Holy One,
    But in the end lie about it all,
    this line forced me to think how many liers r around us..
    poem about truth great work sweetie

  • 9 years ago

    by Rainbow Writers

    Well first, I like how the title was part of the poem - quite ingenius! I liked that you wrote a couplet - not many people write in couplets now, I've always found it 'limiting' and prefer free-verse a great deal more, but I'm always astonished by what poets end up writing in varous forms, I always get caught up in the rules of the form and end up writing something that has no essensce to it, but you wrote a magnificent poem, a great homage to God!

    "
    Fifty percent say they dedicate their lives for the Holy One,
    But in the end lie about it all,"

    I was quite intrigued by this poem - in all honestly, I think I'd be in that criteria, but not by purpose. There's numerous people out there that believe in God, but their actions and words conflict that - they're out poisoning the liver and having casual sex every night of the weak, and just the complete antithesis of what the effects of religion should have on a person, but still go church/temple/mosques/et cetera to pray. I'm in no position to judge, but I've always been intrigued by that, I've always assumed that people who have a belief in God, will let that shine through with every action or words they speak, and embrace the words of their respective religion but often times they don't. There's plenty of reasons why, but I found it interesting, and not many people address that fact.

    So kudos to you to tackling that thought - it's quite brave of you!

  • 9 years ago

    by LittleMsPink

    Wow this was well written and so true
    I love how you started it and love it more how you ended it
    5/5 for me :')