Comments : Rejected kissed and drunken falls

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Heartache at it's finest here. Sadness really just drips from your words... of being lonely without this person in your arms.

    Question: In your title and also in your second stanza, second line... you have "rejected kissed"... wondering, should that be rejected kisses? It just sounds odd to me but I may be reading it wrong.

    I'm usually not a fan of rhyme, but it works here! I especially like the second stanza... it just flows so smoothly!