Comments : Anticipated Lover.

  • 10 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    I like the use of scintillating. It isn't used often around here, so that was refreshing to see.

    You see your future lover as someone whose beauty shines, who loves you flaws and all and terminates every fear you've ever had.

    You don't love this person because you haven't met them yet, but you feel a need for them. You crave their love and can't wait until they arrive.

    A little cliche, but still a good piece.

    I have a little critique, though. I think you poem could benefit from punctuation. Once punctuation is incorporated, you don't need every beginning word of each line capitalized. Just when you are starting a new sentence.

    • 10 years ago

      by David Amenger

      I appreciate your comment a lot.Thanks.Your critique is noted.