Comments : Butterflies vs. Fireflies

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Wow! It took me five times to read to finally spark an idea to comment lol. I loved the intro here because that's really what your poem was about the inside of your heart. It's easy to build up walls and even more so to break down what's inside. The way you decribed this though is great. If you really think about it the title fits really well with the poem I believe because you are decribing the butterflies in your stomach. And the fireflies light up your happiness that was dimmed forvso long. Overall this is a great poem because of the details. :)

  • 10 years ago

    by Burning Angel

    Wow.. i have no idea how to even.. comment this because nothing i say can possibly describe how beautiful this poem is! This is such an amazing write and I really love it! Great job

  • 10 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Crystal, these words were beautifully penned, I love the opening. It was flawless and free and held so much that you opened yourself up.
    I love the rhymes, they were smooth and worked well but it is the content that moved me.
    We all deserve happiness and that butterfly feeling but many of us don't get it, and the addition of fireflies...beautiful and creative because it is happiness that lights us up. While sometimes what we want, we don't always get, we must never stop trying.

    Great job.
    xx