Comments : A Drive

  • 10 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I really love this poem a lot. The simple message is great but it holds so much deeper meaning. I really loved the repeating lines and the way you told a story about your love. It seems like this characters or your whole world is this person. You are driving to fall in love more and more each day it seems. The ending is lovely as well. The fuel to keep you going is them. My one little nitpick is in the first stanza, third line. I dont think you need the word "just" I think it would flow better without it but that's just me. Beautiful write!