Comments : The Ring (a LotR poem)

  • 8 years ago

    by DarkLight

    1st there are some typos, line one 2nd stanza, stooped, instead of stopped, 3rd stanza, I's guess you wanted to write It's or Is, 4th line same stanza, noone instead of none. Last stanza, the word blackened, maybe you should have used the word darkened, those are just some of my suggestions and I hope you okay with my corrections. Other than than, I like your poem.

  • 8 years ago

    by DarkLight

    1st there are some typos, line one 2nd stanza, stooped, instead of stopped, 3rd stanza, I's guess you wanted to write It's or Is, 4th line same stanza, noone instead of none. Last stanza, the word blackened, maybe you should have used the word darkened, those are just some of my suggestions and I hope you okay with my corrections. Other than than, I like your poem.

  • 8 years ago

    by LittleMsPink

    Powerful poem, i really like this one
    kinda reminds me of the movie "the lord of the rings" ;D

    • 8 years ago

      by Lemon

      That's what it's based on lol :)

  • 8 years ago

    by stacy

    Nice write zac !!!! :)