Comments : Starlight Dreaming

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    Joss the imagery you have created here is so very beautiful. The first thing I thought of here is a free spirit. But I can see this person outside every night looking north toward the stars wondering (or as you say in the title dreaming) of what it's like to be close to them. You painted such a lovely picture overall here. Here are a couple of things I dislike though. The capital letters at the beginning of each sentence to me take away the flow of the poem. While you did create a beautiful imagery it could be smoother. There is also no punctuation in some spots where there needs to be. Though you have semi colons to me they could be commas and some periods as well. :). But that's just me. A truly good poem over all though.