Again, the layout here does not appeal to the eye, which is a shame, as people will over look this poem which has such good potential.

You are combining nature here, with the depression, loneliness and hopelessness that you feel about life.

Your words are good, they will be better in stanzas, and get much more readers.

Your titles are really good and eye catching, so you will draw people in with them.

This one i really dont know how to break up at all this was an old one i found and decided to post it. Can you give me any suggestions to break this one up? Also i've been away from writing for a long time and just getting back into things. I appreciate your comments :)