Comments : The Silver Bangle

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    There is so much you can say about this poem joss!! It is wonderful. First of all the message of simplicity is very well used here. As you say it doesn't seem like nothing to anyone else but to this special girl it might have been to only gift she as ever received so she will treasure it. Second of all. I love how she "dreams" of being a princess or that she is a princess :). Third: you made her come alive as the main character and showed us her beautiful personality. She is very happy and free it seems. And loves life! I loved also how you paid attention to the smallest details as well. Like the blushing. It makes the poem come alive. Beautiful!

  • 8 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Aww, what a beautiful and unique little poem/story.

    The flow held up pretty good actually, and the interest was strong throughout. I enjoyed the way you had not only the girl's emotions in it, but you showed how others felt too, and compared this to that of the girls feelings toward this bangle that is so dear to her.

    what a lovely, creative little story. I like seeing different languages and religions, traditions etc, added into poetry. I find them unique and informative.

    Well done.