Comments : With heavy tears...

  • 9 years ago

    by William Mae

    The raw feelings make touching poetry. I to have had those first moments, it's hard, it's heartbreaking, sadly it's life. I feel every ounce of pain in this poem.

  • 9 years ago

    by Jyoti Rawat

    Hmmmm

    Starting is touching when u full day wait for call , endof the day.....
    Its really touching
    Ending ....full of pain

  • 9 years ago

    by Mohan

    I know how you feel in that whole day.
    You designed your sadness by this poem and really sad to read, your expression is 100% real.

    May be you missed her wishes in phone call but your life is full with her blessings.

    take care.

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    As I look at your photo
    starring my way,

    - starring = staring?

    Wow, this is another poem that is truly capturing to the hearts of those who have lost someone. I really connect so much to this poem, and feel that so many others will.

    The way you wait patiently for this call from someone, the tone hints already that you will be waiting forever. I really do get this, it is funny because although we know it is never going to happen, we still dream of it, and think of what the person would say, dream of their voice.

    I like how you mention that other people have still called to send messages, but none of their words have even entered your heart - this just shows how special the person is to you that you have lost. Making the poem even sadder.

    The saddest is the ending, when you find no comfort expect to snuggle up with something of theirs, (which I do myself also) in hope that it will bring you closer to them and make you feel them with you again.

    Really really touching little poem. and I like your title choice.

    Well done.

  • 9 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    5/5.Very touchy straight from the heart.Can relate to missing our elders on our special days when they used to pour their love and blessings on us.
    'and I wrap myself in your shawl'

    this is said so beautifully,you comfort yourself by wrapping in her belonging with heavy tears, missing her voice badly.