This is a beautiful metaphorical piece!!!

I have one question: In your 3rd stanza, 2nd line, did you mean to say coffeine or caffeine ?

Truly a powerful poem here!

Saerelune has a beautiful edge to her metaphors and within this poem it caught my attention from start to finish.

Her word usage is captivating, and incredible. She has a gift of creating metaphors and I applaud her within this poem. What is wonderful about this poem is that the metaphors aren't so heavy that you get confused which is what I enjoy, because I caught myself becoming very emotional within reading and that is something that is very hard to do, she topped it off this week.