"You captured the grace of stars,
storing their luminescence in the basement,
under the stairs. Consequently, young hearts
pursued the pathway to your home, wondering
how mysteries of the sky can fall down
and still burn..."

- The way you punctuated this poem makes it feel so deep, I don't know if that's something a lot of people focus on but I like it. It would be a little easier on the tongue to remove the comma in "luminescence in the basement, under the stairs." A thought from reading it out loud.

"You never saw it coming, the queries,
the gazes, the awe knocking at your door,
until morning dawned and you fathered
another sun."

- This is so incredibly clever, like clever to the point where I had to show my brother who thrives on clever things.

I love the tone of this, it gives off a sad, dark-esk tone. Now I have no idea if this was meant to be about actual Cosmos and what not or if you had a deeper meaning to it. But I feel like I've found a deeper aspect to it. I really like this.