Comments : Net Loss Over A GoaL

  • 9 years ago

    by BlueJay

    I like the perspectives taken in this piece and how each stanza has a little more depth and the end has just a hint of personal growth. I really like the way you did the tone for this piece, it is subtle but easy enough to visualize people in this kind of relationship saying this or even just painting the image of how so many relationships are with other people and things. I read this a couple times and each time saw a new possibility or meaning to it, but each time it maintained its immense amount of heart.

    Interesting write