Comments : not betray

  • 7 years ago

    by alka mendiratta

    Meena this is just an excellent write.The title only engrossed me and the flow with perfect rhymes.You are conveying so beautifully some of the feelings you have held for long in your heart.

    for fear my stormy essay
    will blow you far away

    Can read the pain you are withholding with the fear if your lips betray you will create a distant
    to whom you want to tell your inner feelings and dreams
    and swallow the hurt, that I can't convey

    A great piece of work

  • 7 years ago

    by William Mae

    If ive ever understood a poem, i understand this one, if i had the talent i could have written it myself, beautiful

  • 7 years ago

    by DarkLight


  • 6 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    "as my tears ache to lay in your arms each day" - excellent line. Well written.

  • 6 years ago

    by kelleyana

    Well, they say sometimes, somethings are better left unsaid, but i think we should always be honest with others even if it causes us to take different path. I will never lay at rest in someone arms with so much unsaid words. At the end of the day, it's always difficult to decide if we should keep things to ourselves or just simple say it. love it, very well done.