Comments : The Robot (Senryu)

  • 5 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I don't think I have ever read a poem based on a robot/machine.

    I would not class this as a haiku poem, as it is not based on nature. But I understand that you have used the rules of this form, from the syllable count to create your poem.

    So well done.

  • 5 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Like Baby Rainbow stated, since this is not a nature themed poem, it is not a haiku. It is a senryu, which has the same syllable count but can be used for other categories such as yours.

    Great job on the syllable count by the way, it is spot on.

    I like the idea of using the robot, it's refreshing to see something unique. The robot works tirelessly throughout night and day, as long as the switch is on... it's gears will continue to do their job.

    I can also interpret this as a human feeling like a robot, going through the motions of each day. But I don't think that is what you mean, I'm just rambling.

    Well done, LoneWolf!