Very good poem and very deep. It made me want to take the creep, and ensure he never walks again or able to speak the words good girl ever again. Glad to see your writing. I hope you are doing amazing.
3 years ago
by Ben Pickard
This is a brave and powerful write that had me enthralled, choked up and enraged because these monsters actually exist.
Your rhyming throughout is spot on, but that seems irrelevant considering the overwhelming content.
This is excellent writing.
The pain of innocence stolen _ couldn't but keep my heart grieving. As true as such sick ones exist, she's still the good girl, I must say! Let's speak up for these fragile souls; whose innocence are gambled on.
Such a powerful message here. Keep bringing in the truth to light! Thanks for sharing this piece with us!
Now this made some tears escape my eyes. Yes, I did cry, Ren. I hate this kind of violence. I hate how the lust of the flesh destroys the life of innocent girls. These monsters create a trauma forever unhealed for a few hours of satisfaction. The picture of that demon saying good girl, good girl tore my heart apart. The story was so vivid.