Comments : July 4th Of Many Firsts

  • 4 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Simple, but beautiful.

    I challenge you to write another poem but with more detail of what actually happened this night. This poem sums up the night but doesn't really show us how the night felt. It shows us how you felt about the night.

    But you could describe what the night contained, where were you, what colours were the lights, what noises were around you, describe the childrens reactions?

    Just some suggestions to boost this poem up. It has good potential.