Comments : In Your Hands

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    The imagery in this is superb - I loved it. The use of onomatopoeia in the first line - "poof" - was excellent. It slaps you round the face and draws your attention to the piece instantly. The "poofing" dandelion is a lovely little visual and the idea of someone going "poof" like a dandelion is brilliant! The alliteration of "wild wish" and then the imagery of being blown away at the end really are excellently used tools here; well done and all the best,
    Ben