Comments : Have Heart (Senryu)

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    This was an amazing senryu to me. The title does say it all as well. Have heart, you want to give or have someone give you their heart.

    First line: Beating is a great word here intentional or not heh. This is a great metaphor to me, this heart is beating on a rib cage but you are acting like you are the prisoner here. Well played on your word chouce . Representing the heart as a prisoner as yourself is brilliant honestly. The beating is the pleaing with your heart. You want the cage to open up, emotionally and physically. It really could go either way here, actuality this definitely can be taken a lot of ways which is why I love this so much, and putting this in the love category is ingenious actually. Well dine. 5/5