Comments : Ramblings Within Me

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Soul

    I love the honesty within this poem. Also to me the dialogue plays a nice role within this as well. It makes it more personal and more realistic. This seems to be narrated by your thoughts which is an excellent way to express your deepest feelings. Okay I also noticed you used past tense here which tells me that your friends are no longer your friends and in that you feel more depressed, and getting the help that you need is a great step. Realizing it sometimes is a very difficult thing. Though some people might not like your ending I did, because you explained why you want to "go away" because you lost all of your friends. All in all this poem is short but holds a strong impact on the heart of your readers. 5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by Cat

    Im just depressed ; -;

  • 9 years ago

    by JesusFreakAuthor

    Awe I'm so sorry, I am always here for you no matter what, and by your side, and whatever you are going through I'm here to try and get you through it the best I can, huge hugs!!!