Although short, I can relate to what is being said in this poem. It is the build up and suspense of keeping all that emotion inside, and then finally having no control over it anymore, and it all comes flooding out.

I like the word Streaming being used as the tears coming down your eyes and rolling down your cheeks, it shows how much emotion pours up, and how long you have stored it.

The word unbearable also stands out to end the poem with, leaving that real impact of how painful this pain is, like intense heartache that you can't hold back anymore.

I think also this message shows the strength people have when they hide thing inside because they want to pretend to the world that they are okay, even though they know themselves that people are not fooled that easily by their charade.

I like the title choice, and also how you use the blurred colours within your poem. It is like everything you know around you, no longer feels the same, and that is when this darkness creeps in, and the only colour known then is blackness.

nice job.

I love this Zoei. It breaks my heart but it has a tone and voice to it so completely unlike any of your other works. I like the format here, it stands out and it makes the piece a little easier to digest since it is pure emotion. I've felt like this so many times and I hate knowing that you finally understand it. Amazingly penned, beautiful use of color and form. The word choice is simple without being dull and the flow is perfectly silky. Greatly written.