Comments : Barefoot selves

  • 9 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I find this quite a deep poem about how a relationship can change someone. How you can feel connected to them, but at the same time disconnected with yourself.

    I like your use of his words staining you - really powerful way to show how much affect this person had on you with just his words.

    I also love this unique line:
    i have been a caesura
    since w/he died.

    Especially like the way you put we and he together as if it is the same thing.

    I appreciated the honesty within this poem.
    The person made you weak- where you felt in control of nothing, except your poetry and writing.

    I also like your title choice, stripping the characters back to who they really are underneath.
    Nice work.