I just have a small grammatical correction:

But he'll lose,
If you choose,
To achieve it.

I belive that there should be no comma after "choose". It would be a bit more powerful that way, as well as more proper for the sentence.

Other than that, a very enjoyable read. I'd actually be intrigued if you made this into a super hero poem saga. It has that potential.

5/5

V/r
IdTakeABulletForYou
(Stephen)