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I just have a small grammatical correction:
But he'll lose,
If you choose,
To achieve it.
I belive that there should be no comma after "choose". It would be a bit more powerful that way, as well as more proper for the sentence.
Other than that, a very enjoyable read. I'd actually be intrigued if you made this into a super hero poem saga. It has that potential.