I really like the poem, the structure and the layout, and also the powerful message it holds. Creative work.

As a suggestion, I would personally remove the exclamation marks from the end of every sentence? I know you like using these, but for me they should kind of make a specific impact of one line in particular, whereas you have them for every line here, so none of them really stand out. Does that make sense?

Powerful conclusion line, ending the poem with the final thoughts which sum up the point in the poem.

Excellent - and very true. Five stars.