Comments : In your pocket

  • 8 years ago

    by Hellon

    Your poetry always moves me..sometimes...if you are not signed in at the same time as me I forget to read...shame on me..sweets...

    Hock me to your day,

    ^^

    should that be hook?

    clip me in a key chain,
    let me be a necessity
    in your life...

    Actually I found this quite sad...a necessity like car keys, change for the parking metre?

    Carry me around like
    a fragile belonging,
    -I. Am. Yours-

    You sound so hard and cold here...

    For your fingers to
    interlock in mine,
    and leave me hanging
    in your webs of doubt.

    You were the missing
    key, but how come
    you never opened
    the door.....?!

    Someone did not understand you I feel..you know...sometimes we have to consider the fact that we do not always understand ourselves.

    • 8 years ago

      by Meme

      The fact that you commented means a lot hon. I always love how you receive my poetry and how interpret it back to me.
      Thank you :)

  • 8 years ago

    by yogi73

    Your metaphors are effective and endearing. I get a sense of hope in this poem, but a bit of sadness at the end. We all hoped to be loved in a grand way, but at the end of the day, a simple act of opening a door can be meaningful.

    cheers

    • 8 years ago

      by Meme

      Thanks for the comment!

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    I Thought I had commented on this already....evidently not, Meme, sometimes when you write, like this, I just get lost between the lines, it doesn't matter if it is a long or short piece, you have such a fantastic way with words that the mets and sims hit me right where they're supposed to.

    As usual, Fantastic writing.

    • 8 years ago

      by Meme

      Hhhhh, I usually feel that way about your poems too!

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Yes, love the use of metaphors in this. A lovely flow to this too.