Comments : The 15 Minute Drive

  • 4 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Oh Rusheena, I am so glad you have submitted a new piece! #nice to see you around!

    This poem is so heart-breaking because it starts of showing hope and dreams, and positive attitude for the future that everything will be oka6y and will fall into place, but yet at the end it has all been smashed into the ground and taken away.

    I too connect to this because I can't drive yet, and it does limit your abilities in the world these days.

    What a detailed poem, so sad. I like how you give us a little bit of the conversation, and not the whole sentences, the reader knows exactly what was said, which shows you have written the poem well.

    • 4 years ago

      by Rusheena

      Thanks, Saffie, and it's great to hear from you too! This is part of my final writing project in my creative writing class. I'm not used to writing prompts, especially about family; so, I had a hard time writing all of them. But I glad you liked this!