Comments : A message in a Bottle...(Double Lanturne)

  • 8 years ago

    by Hellon

    I think this poem suggests that you perhaps met in a country that one of you did not live permanently in? Neither knew what would happen when you returned to your own place of residence but...you expressed a sense of hope and...it seems it was rewarded in the end. I always admire members who try new forms and you have always been one to give them a go so kudos to you...little typo in your title...

    • 8 years ago

      by GB

      I fixed that error, thank you :)

      I dream to try all poetry forms which is pretty difficult to achieve.

      You grasped many thoughts here ~winks

  • 8 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    GB I Love this, the title really grabbed me and Im a big fan of the Lanturne especially when done so well!

    You express the emotions well in so few lines and I really like the fact you did a double Lanturne, I like Stringing forms like this (I especially like stringing Haiku with Tanka's) you get a really measured read :)

    You word choice and tempo etc was great and im glad i stumbled on this piece:)

    Great Job :)

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hello Samia:)

    I love the shape of this poetry format, the Lanturne, it is so sophisticated!

    The message seems very romantic. I can imagine the woman standing there and finding 'his 'words and her heart jumping with joy and hope returning to her.

    Well done, dear and thank you so very much for what you have written to me underneath my poem. Highly appreciated!

    ~hugs~ Ingrid

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Excellent, clever write - I love the structure. well done.