Comments : Marllan

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello,

    I like the format you have used here. Dedicating the first line to one word allows the reader to concentrate on it and ponder its meaning. Here you have linked it to the second line. So, we have 'everyday discover new. This sentence suggests there is more and so encourages this reader to read on...

    I have no other earthly friend,
    Nature the father of Marllan is mine.
    ^
    This statement is powerful. To say 'I have no friends' is commonplace, but to say ' no other earthly friend' is quite another thing all together. It makes this reader feel shocked as to question the reason. The second part is intriguing and I will have to inquire as to what/who Marllan is. ? I presume Marllan is the farther of nature. Is this a religious person?

    All merry things comes by paper work,
    And fulfil several qualities of heart and mind.
    ^
    Last two lines. More statements that make me wonder. This is good to wonder about another person's thought process. In a literal sense, paper work, equates happiness which in turn satisfy desires and soul. This could also be a metaphor for: work hard in order to be satisfied and happy.

    Another good poem.

    Thank you.

    Michael