I have just read this poem. The lightness and honest affection is well balanced throughout. The use of internal rhyme and the structure. More than this perhaps is the use of the word 'beloved' this is not seen as often as you think, or at least as much as I would think. Beloved = to love: bi-, be- + loven
This show a love for another, a pure and honest love. Feelings indeed!
Well done - I will read the 2nd part now.
5 years ago
I like the simple imagery in this and the unique uses of syntax. Great style, nice job of flow, and above all else, you did an excellent job wrapping us up in the love you have for this person.