Comments : Dealing with a broken heart.

  • 6 years ago

    by Cindy

    Paul what a heartbreaking piece. The reader can feel the sadness dripping from your pen.

    I wish that I could open my chest,
    and show you the scars on my heart.
    Made by you, the day you walk away,
    tearing my world apart.

    This brought tears to my eyes. When you love someone and the love isn't returned the pain is unbearable.

    Excellent job!
    Take care
    Love Cindy

    • 6 years ago

      by anand singh

      Thanks for the comforting words Cindy. I haven't posted anything for a while, but this was a burden on my chest and I had to release it. Take care.

  • 6 years ago

    by Ingrid de Klerck

    Hello Paul,

    When you love someone so much and have to witness their love for you die in their eyes, it is unbearable. How to go on living after being thrown away like a disposable object? Yah, that can be an almost impossible task....yet, with the help of God, I think we can!

    Let it out, dear friend, keep writing and one day the burden will lift *hugs*

    All the best,

    • 6 years ago

      by anand singh

      Thanks for the kind comforting words my friend. The thing I cannot understand is why she keeps coming back. She broke our friendship over 10 times in the 13 years since I've known her. Every time she ask for forgiveness and express how stupid she thinks she was to leave the friendship. I always accept her with open arms.

  • 6 years ago

    by Koan

    It is a very touching poem and the reader can feel that it was from your heart but you need to
    clean up your rhyming by following some basic rules!

    1; the rhyming lines or couplets must have the same syllable counts

    2; try to use Perfect rhyme meaning:
    "skylight" and "highlight" "bean" and "green"are a perfect rhyme, while "leave" and "believe" is not

  • 4 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    So raw and honest...just straight from the heart.