Tommy,

I really like the format of this piece, along with the flow and rhythm of your rhyme scheme.

This reads like a broken heart's rant or rap and I think it's beautifully and tastefully done.

Starting with the beginning stages of a love, ending with the sorrowful feelings at the end of the relationship.

Just a very powerful write, thank you for sharing!

Tommy,

Such a heartfelt piece, full of raw emotion. Many of us have been broken-hearted and could probably relate to this. I feel this is based on some real life events of heartache and hurt and obvious ending of a relationship that meant a lot to you

The rhythm and syllabic count me the piece flow very smooth.

Well done, Em