Comments : 100m Olympic final (Senyru)

  • 8 years ago

    by Cindy

    Michael
    Very interesting Sentry

    Take care Cindy
    *big hugs

  • 8 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Hi Michael,

    Ah yes....what a scandal, eh? I agree they should be banned from competition for a long, long time!

    Congrats on your 200th poem, by the way:)

    He explodes from blocks,
    Leaving the field in his wake:

    ^^
    Could almost see the athlete as he takes of like a rocket! Could see the audience holding their breath, the admiration, the suspense and the feeling of awe of what these super-humans can do...and then...

    Thank God for doping

    ^^
    The disillusion, the sarcasm in the 'twist' is so spot on, as there seems to be no end to the many scandals around doping of all kinds in sports!

    Well done, loved the read.

    (((hugs)) xx

  • 8 years ago

    by Bob Shank

    I remember the first time I ever visually saw an olympic runner accused of doping, it was Ben Johnson of Canada I think, but as I was watching the race on tv, I'm saying to myself, his right shoulder looks like the hulk, it just looked deformed it was so huge, then it was discovered he was doping, brought back that memory, it's a shame that athletes have to cheat to compete at a higher level, what are we teaching our kids.....great form, powerful statement.

  • 8 years ago

    by PETER EDWARDS

    Excellent Michael! A great sacastic poem!
    Yes, the whole world seem to be engaged in cheating these days, so your poem has a heavy dose of salt in it!
    Great 'tounge in cheek' poem Mr Darcy.
    From you I would of not expected anything less!

  • 8 years ago

    by NOOR

    Hello Michael :-)

    Congratulations for your 200th poem in this site. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

    Doping is SO morally wrong yet atheletes usein for that and very little get caught. Sad that sport is not clean.

    • 8 years ago

      by Mr. Darcy

      ^^
      I find humor is the best tonic. The world is too serious so looking at it with goggly eyed glasses helps somewhat. Lol

  • 8 years ago

    by Darren

    Hi Michael

    You should post this under humour.
    Such an under used section on here

    This is a great Senryu, just shows how much you can cram into so little.

    well done.

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Michael

    I am sorry that it has taken so long for me to comment on this wonderful senyru and to congratulate you on your 200th poem.

    As Darren says, it could be placed into the humour section. Maybe we should have a black humour section on this site as so many senyru seem to fall into that category!

    A shameful topic that has been given a humorous twist by your talented mind.
    All the best and take care,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Hellon

    This made me laugh out loud. When I was younger I used to think these athletes were just so dedicated to their sport that that's what gave them the speed to achieve the impossible....how niave of me haha!!!

    Great tongue in cheek looking at how it really happens :)

  • 8 years ago

    by GB

    I like that technique of cutting when used smartly, it what added too much to this beautiful piece. You are doing awesome job with all forms of poetry.

    Cheating is always disappointing :)

    Very enjoyable, Micheal. Thank you for sharing.