Comments : The Darkness

  • 3 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Hello Ciara,

    you are on a roll...

    I like this format. Probably more so than your last. I guess beauty is in the eye of the beholder eh?

    The rhyming couplets are effective in that they are spaced and allow this reader to digest their content.

    A dark theme again and one that many on here will relate to. Darkness: a feeling of loneliness and despair. A feeling that no one understands or even cares. With all this frustrated anger going no where one often internalises it.

    This is my favourite couplet, a real dark one too: Around your throat grasps its cold, dark hand
    Dragging you down where no one understands.
    ^
    Excellent! :O)

    Getting these feeling out on the page and sharing is an excellent way to heal.

    Keep on writing.

    Take care,

    Michael

    • 3 years ago

      by Ciara

      Thank you so much. I get a little nervous when i share anything i write. Its an outlet that keeps me out of my own head.

  • 3 years ago

    by DarkLight

    I truly agree with your words.
    Nice piece.

    • 3 years ago

      by Ciara

      Thank you so much

  • 3 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    A vey well written and well rhymed piece, Ciara. Well done and welcome to the site - great to see some new talent.
    All the very best,
    Ben

    • 3 years ago

      by Ciara

      Thank you. I appreciate the kind words.

  • 3 years ago

    by Hiro

    I think you mean "Accept," instead of "Except".

    You are a poetic spirit. I empathize with this poem, every word is to me as wondrous as the thought by which it was inspired.

    A word, to console;

    Reality is no more (and no less!) than the reflection of your psyche on the mirror of perception. I suggest that you read my poem, 'Fading Mirror.'

    • 3 years ago

      by Ciara

      I did mean accept, thank you for pointing it out so i can change it. Thank you for everything you said & i will read your poem.