Comments : My Bride Will Look so Beautiful

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Andrew.

    A lovely little rhyming piece here which has a strong sense of imagery about it.

    "With waves of emotion swelling up with the tide"
    ^^^^

    I love that line.

    Great write. All the very best,
    Ben

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Andrew,

    A nice beat and rhythm in this piece which keeps it flowing smoothly.

    My favourite lines are - 'the past what the future already knew' because here although you both know or should know each others past you are willing to make them your future on this you wedding day

    And 'what memories can be like a barefoot imprint' because in a sense you are going into this with all eyes open and a matter of blindness because although you live each other who knows what'll happen?

    Take care, Em