Comments : Honey Bee

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Lucero. A clever write here. I do have some suggestions though.

    "When them will buzz" - should this be(e!) "when will they buzz"? and "has been stolen by this hands" - "these hands" perhaps?

    Aside from that, I truly marvel at the way your mind works!

    All the best,
    Ben