Comments : The ride

  • 3 years ago

    by Em

    Wow, that's deep

  • 3 years ago

    by Brenda

    Thank-you! It's one of those things that just came to me on my way to work one day. I got to work and just started writing.

  • 3 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Brenda, I hope you are well.

    This is a phenomenally original write, not least because of the way you deal with the content.
    I understand that this is not an amusing topic (only you can say whether you wrote it with any humour intended) but the way you go about recounting what is happening unfortunately left a smile on my face! It is so blunt, to the point and matter-of-fact. It's almost like, okay, this is happening, it's not what I wanted but ho-hum! lol
    But as I was reading, I was struck by the honesty you display in so much of your work; it is truly refreshing.
    What I took from this mostly though are the little details: the little things that in those kind of moments you may (unexpectedly) find yourself worrying about - your body being exposed, your family having to clear your belongings and the art you couldn't bring yourself to throw from the kids (I can relate to that one - and they're still young!)

    This is a refreshing and blunt piece of poetry that I enjoyed immensely - you have made a very dark subject easier to read with a sprinkling of very black humour!

    All the very best
    Ben

    • 3 years ago

      by Brenda

      Ben, Thank you so much! I did write this with a bit of humor and sadness too. I was writing and crying too because I was thinking about my family and never getting to see them again. After experiencing loss at an early age I guess my coping mechanism is a bit of dark humor. I also wrote it a bit tongue in cheek, part of me knew I was dying and the other part was worrying about my backlogged work. I'm so glad you enjoyed it-I got a lot out of writing this. Take care-Brenda