Comments : Hope (Essence)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Samia

    How on earth you have made a poem out of two lines and twelve syllables is anyone's guess but you have - this is lovely and a form that I hadn't heard of.

    Take care and well done on this write,
    Ben

    *Edit On second read - does the first line have 7 syllables here?
    Hope = 1
    approaches =3
    from = 1
    above= 2

    what about something like "hope travels from above"

    Up to you, either way this is still great

    • 9 years ago

      by GB

      Hi Ben,

      Thank you for bringing this to my attention, the word "approach is just fundamental for the meaning, so I will just make slight changes, thank you once more, greatly appreciate it :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Brilliant Samia - sneaky and very cleverly done!

  • 9 years ago

    by Em

    As Ben says how you have written a piece from 12 syllables and 2 lines is my guess but you have and you have done it beautifully. Great form.

    Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Abstract Poet

    Outstanding poem I love it.