Comments : Stranger in my own Skin

  • 8 years ago

    by Mr. Darcy

    Hello Hellon,

    I love the form. It seems this poem from 2008 has a style that I have appreciated and used many times recently. It works well to hold a readers interest, the short lines, the use of punctuation, the spacing, the rhyme, dialogue and CAPITAL letters.

    The fear is well described throughout, screaming, Zombies, green eyes, trembling fingers, I could go on...

    I think the fear of needles is a common one, so adding this to the general fear in this piece adds value. I must admit, I am unsure what the poem is about. Is it about needle phobia, a tattoo parlor, or perhaps confused identity of some description?

    Anyway, I love the tension and the way you lead the reader to 'The Needle...' trailing off suggest more to be said, but what...

    Take care,


  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Love this. The descriptions are wonderfully done, the imagery, the form itself.. Just everything about it. The fear really shines through.

  • 7 years ago

    by Naughtymouse

    Hi hello

    Gotta say this is a killer write, i love how it looks and your vocabulary is perfect, I think alot of people can identify with it and I jist love your "voice" in it.

    I wish I could've nominated this.