Comments : Paper Relationship

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Another elegant piece written by you. Enthralling to say the least.

    The paper waited,
    as if its relationship to the pen
    was a broken one.
    ^^
    This opening is really intriguing like a good thing turned bad. It felt like it was about writers block a first but I don't know. Paper waiting in pen was quite a good image, their relationship broken due to words not coming?

    I had much to feed it
    to teach it of my need,
    ^^
    See now I feel it's not of writers block but that you have many thoughts that come all at once which makes it confusing to write down so you wait well the paper does and now I feel it's about something you've been waiting a lifetime on.

    to be able to keep my secrets.
    ^^
    We all have those secrets we ant no-one to know about and this makes me think you're kind of writing a diary entry on this piece of paper so then its kept a secret. I know many of us did, some of still do probably.

    With the help of the winds,
    it winked
    and i'm sure we can be happy together.
    ^^
    I like the image here of the paper (I think) winking in the winds. Secrets kept and you will be happy together because as long as you have somewhere to write, you will keep those secrets.

    Nominated. Em

    • 8 years ago

      by DarkLight

      Thanks Em.

      Well elaborated...

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Great piece Shanky. Sorry I can't comment more fully, but I'm having trouble with my computer at the moment and I am on a tablet which I hate!

    Take care and all the best,
    Ben