Comments : Faded Dreams

  • 9 years ago

    by Em

    Maher, another elegantly written piece with a very raw emotion within it that made me believe this is unfortunately based on real events although I may be wrong. The image is vivid a man learning to love again but gets broken a bit more because of the leaving of this lady who you promised the world to.

    Baby, do you remember
    that time I had broken your fall?
    You smiled and I did surrender
    my kingdom, my innermost core.
    I dreamed that I would be a parent
    to her baby, a step dad I'd be.
    Her perfect blue eyes now a remnant
    of something I never will see.
    ^^
    This opening stanza, I feel speaks of a man loving again after being broken and helping the lady overcome some insecurities too buy breaking her fall. How sad that you were willing to love her child yet wasn't able to maybe something to do with broken trust. Not many men would be up for that so I take my hat off to you and I'm sorry you weren't able.

    Sweet babe, if you ever remember
    the man whose cold frown you broke,
    shed your light through a tender surrender
    on a heart that lies barren of hope.
    As you grow, abide by your mother -
    'neath her feet is where heaven lies.
    You may grow to call me a stranger
    but these eyes see you always as mine.
    ^^
    A sense of reminiscing about the what ifs and should have been but I feel this is to the child you weren't allowed to love and that although things went a bit sour in this relationship that you still worship the ground this child's mother walks on. It's hard to go through something like this and overcome it but just you writing about it shows you have the strength.

    All the best, Em

    • 9 years ago

      by Maher

      You have a very interesting way of interpreting this one Em and you're almost right :)

      The whole thing is about the child of a girl that I was very in love with. We were together years ago and things didn't work (long story - she lives in USA). We found each other again years later while we were both in the process of divorce from our failed marriages. I flew over to see her for the first time and we clicked, so we had planned for her to come live here (Australia). Neither of us knew she was pregnant from her ex husband, she didn't look it at all. He didn't want the child, so I decided to be a dad. She was born, I visited a second time when she was 5 months old and I fell in absolute love with her. Having to fly back home from there tore me apart...I think I missed baby more than her mother. Eventually I found that she lied about who the father is and didn't intend on coming here, so again, it ended.

      Little baby's name is Victoria, and the title of the poem is her mother's old Yahoo username when we used to talk years ago from when I was 14 up till 18.

      - The first 2 lines are about when I literally broke her fall from the bed in the hotel I stayed at there.
      - The second 2 lines is when she smiled at me after I caught her and I found myself attached.
      - The first 2 lines of the second stanza refer to how she won't remember me because she was so young when I was with her.
      - I then tell her to listen to her mother, because I always whispered that to her when her mother was around. It made them both smile somehow.
      - The line right after that has a religious meaning. In Islam, the prophet Muhammad said that "heaven is beneath the feet of your mother" and I firmly believe that. I have no grudge against her nor do I dislike her, and I know she will be a great mother.

      I won't lie, I was in tears while writing this, mainly because there's a melody to it that makes it that much more intense.

      Thank you again Em, your comments never go unappreciated. May peace follow you wherever you go :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Em

    Maher what a sad story. Reading back now it all fits into place. I'm sorry this happened to you and I hope you become the Dad, you wished to be.

    All the best.

  • 9 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Hello Maher

    This is a truly emotional and moving piece of writing that flows well.
    After reading your reply to Em, the poem is all the more effective.
    I guess that's the problem with feeling so much love - it comes with a negative too, or a balance.
    I'm sorry to read what happened to you, but who knows? Life plays funny tricks on us sometimes.
    All the best
    Ben

    • 9 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you , good Sir. It does play tricks indeed, but everything happens for a reason :)

  • 8 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    What a heart-breaking story, Maher...babies are indeed lovable, their innocence is something we could only envy. They are very vulnerable and dependent that is why we feel complete when we are there to love and protect them. This poem has so much love unfolding in each line. Beautiful piece.

    • 8 years ago

      by Maher

      Thank you, glad it resonated with you :)