Comments : My Wishful Heart.

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Shanky, i liked this. So much emotion within that's personal to you I feel but that is also relatable tp so many people.

    My heart is inflated,
    with emotions
    that I wish to empty.
    ^^
    I love this opening because it reminds me of a balloon full of air that awaits being popped (because it usually happens) but full of something inside that will make people happy or sad like a note from afar.

    How I wish
    that,
    wishes were horses,
    ^^
    Now that would be good because instead of wishing and hoping you could jump on, saddle up and ride to where your wish was. Lovely.

    I would have you by my side
    and never let you go.
    Make you grow
    and let your beauty glow
    in the eyes of companions
    enemies
    friends
    and family.
    ^^
    I like the subtle rhymes here. I think all of us would be happy to have someone that makes us happy and show them off.

    Make you happy
    fall in love
    and have much peace.
    ^^
    Lovely ending to a beautiful piece. Inner peace I think comes with happiness and love amongst other things

    Take care, Em

  • 8 years ago

    by Brenda

    Beautiful wishes for the one you love-lovely write-