Comments : Time (of my life)

  • 8 years ago

    by Em

    Michael, this is good. I like your wording and structure. I love how you portray the hope of loving and needing a second hand. We all need one after all.

    My heart once ticked
    a melodic beat,
    but now pulsates a meloncholic
    bleat.
    ^^
    Loved this part. It reminds me of me haha meloncholic should be melancholic.

    All the best, Em

    • 8 years ago

      by Michael

      Well spotted Em... haha glad I had someone in mind when writing :) x