Grant,

It seems insulting to break this down technically, so all I will say is that the flow is very well done indeed with some effortless rhyming.

As for the content, it is moving beyond words and if literal, you have my sincerest sympathy.

SL

Thank you yes im good friends with the little boys grand dad and was asked hours before the funeral if i could possibly write something.
This was difficult for me feeling emotional about this at the time because this poor boy had led a lofe of abuse and died from a blow to the head by the mother boyfriend.
It still affects me when i think about it.
Thank you again
Regards
Grant

A very difficult read done so well. You have my deepest sympathy.

This is truly sad and brings,back horrible memories for me.

Thoughts to the family and you also.
Em

Hello Grant,

sorry for this belated reply - I didn't realise from the title its contents.

Death is always a sad, but no more so when it happens early in a life. Children are our future, so not reaching the tender age of 5 is wrong on all accounts. I feel for you and of course to the family who will never forget the treasure they have lost to heaven.

You've made a good job of expressing how the family feel - I am sure you touched the spot that needed to cry.

Take care,

Michael