Comments : For the most part

  • 2 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Yakari,

    This poem practically brought a tear to my eye, damn you woman! There are so many powerful and heart-wrenching lines in this.

    with my hair tied because alive
    my curls always hid my face

    mostly, I think that my womb will remain intact
    that it will dry up. won't stretch for any life.

    I think, that the end will be tragically beautiful
    that life after this one is a dream so good
    people never wake up again

    ^^

    Just a few.

    All I would say is that when you can convey your emotions so movingly and wonderfully, you have plenty to live for.

    Take care and all the best,

    Ben

    ps. I will nominate this tomorrow; it deserves the front page.

  • 2 years ago

    by Em

    Yakari, this is the rawest piece I have read for some time and I can totally understand how you feel because when life throws us in at the deep end we always feel like we're drowning in it. You always have a unique way with words, powerful.

    Em

  • 2 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Judging Comment

    Yakari, had me in tears.. I do love her writing, always have and this poem is incredibly raw and emotional. She knows how to get the reader. I have never read such a spirited, truthful and explosive poem to date, until now.. very powerful!

  • 2 years ago

    by mossgirl19

    Oh wow...this indeed is the rawest piece I have come across in here and how hugely if affected me...well more of drowned me...suffocated me...my heart just hurt! This is truly commendable.