Comments : If I was life, I would live for you alone

  • 8 years ago

    by Ben Pickard

    Adewole,

    Firstly, welcome to the site. Great to have you here and great to have you in The Collaborators.
    This is a beautiful little love poem; charming and wonderful to read.

    Take care and keep writing,

    Ben

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      Ben,

      Thank you very much for your encouragement

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    It looks like you have only just begun...
    You are a talented writer.
    Please; keep writing!!

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      Hmmm.........thank you for your words of comfort.

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    I would have said "we", however I'm not sure what context that word is supposed to be taken in, in your poem. But yes. We've, or you, have just begun.

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      Fear not Lone Wolf, the heart does not beat for itself alone neither does the stars shine without the darkness.
      I am with you till there is no more sun!

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    "I need more dreams, and less life. I need that dark; in a little more light."

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      If you want more dream, sleep on never waking but living with a lesser life.

      The dark is a lonely place filled with tripping objects but the light shines and you could find your lost way.

      What you're searching is within you not in a far away land. Arise embrace your destiny but remember mistakes are part of learning in life, expect them and don't run from them

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    Those are actually lyrics: however I agree with that. It's always best to face your problems instead of running from them.
    I'm not quite sure what my destiny is: however if it involves any intentions of harm: I'd rather take a different path.

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      We live by the choices we make and also we've the power to make things right or flow with its uncertainty.

      The end is unknown but live rightly today and learn from yesterday hopelessness.

      Tomorrow will decide what the futures holds for you. Until then live your dream, cherished life and don't waste your opportunity.

      Time is ticking, make every moments count but I will see you in the path of fate

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    Fate.....?

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      We all have a fate to fullfiled

  • 8 years ago

    by Beautiful Tragedy

    My fate, I hope; shall not be associated with any harm.

    • 8 years ago

      by Adewole

      Work it out and have a positive insight for a bright future. After a cloudy situation the sky becomes clear and sunny.

  • 8 years ago

    by Khadz

    Beautiful and simple writing piece :) well done